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“A good book only needs an exciting story. The characters are not important. Do you agree?” Write a composition making reference to a book you’ve read. Can just an exciting story make a book beautiful? Personally I don’t think so. A good story, without some important characters, is like a house without the furniture: incomplete. In my opinion, the characters are so important because all people, while they are reading, try to “live” the story of the book by the protagonists’ perspective. Just let me do an example: the famous book “Harry Potter” has surely got an exciting story: a magical world is threatened by an evil wizard who wants to become immortal. But the principal character, Harry, is very important: do you really think that every kid in the word would read a book with the same story of “Harry Potter” if the main character would be an old boring man? In conclusion, I think that a good book needs, beside of a wonderful story, some important and charming characters too.

Public Comments

1. take out your colons and use commas or periods. conclution-the word beside needs an s. Good job, i like it!
2. Surely, the character of the wizard is important too, and neither he nor HP can be made interesting characters through a single attribute: "evil" or "kid". Expand a little. Mistakes: delete "personally". no comma after "story" or "characters". delete "In my opinion" "were a boring old man". delete "I think". "besides a wonderful".